You do have potential
Keep practicing animation and your other talents. I look forward to seeing what you are bringing to my collab table.
Pretty funny to me
Now that I heard your voice, I believe you can defiantly pull off an Ike in my cartoon. Did you do both voices in this, just curious, because the character that took the gameboy or whatever sounds like it would go good for the character you are voicing over for me.
yes i did both voices :)
not bad, but not good
I can see you put your efforts into the animation parts very well. That I appreciate,
but here is where to improve.
Add sound effects
maybe if possible, add voice acting?
extend the movie length.
you did a fine job animating, but focus on these areas that need improvement.
I wish you luck on your future submissions.
Thanks for that! (See above response)
sneak peeks belong in the alpha section
The portal is not the place for, well, sneak peeks. Those belong in the alpha section of newgrounds. Now about the "sneak peek", it seems more like a comic with cheesy voice acting. There is no animation except for what I think is a V-cam moving around. The part where the woman is describing the parts of the Nightcrawlers armor, seems like it was made not in different sections, but all in one scene. I say this because when it switches to go lower, i can see where the woman was previously. This is most notable at the end of that part, where i can see her hand and she is standing next to it.
The movie repeats itself when it finishes, something that usually is not appreciated by newgrounders.
Where to improve? Try and animate this movie, make it seem more fluid, and not so... lifeless, like a comic. Hire better voice actors, and if possible, work with a partner maybe? As the saying goes, "Two heads are better than one".
One last thing, please don't rush. Theres enough bad content on this site to give newgrounds a bad name. Not to say that this is totally bad, buts its not totally good either. Take your time, work things through, and have fun with what your doing. Hope to see improvement on your next submission. Have a good day.
teasers don't belong in the portal
As the summary describes, teasers aren't meant for the portal. If you really wanted to post a teaser of something you are working on, The alpha section of newgrounds is the place to submit it to. While this actually may have the potency to be good, it needs some work and debugging. The animation when I viewed it seemed slightly choppy. I also noticed in the near end that when the assassin's target was killed, I could see the pupil showing past the left eye lid. Its not totally bad at all, the flash, you just need maybe to practice more on animation, and know what belongs in the portal and what not. Whenever you feel the slightest hint of boredom, practice in flash, that's what I do.
Work on this animation and small side projects, don't let ambition get the best of you. Most of all, never ever rush. Keep practising, someday, you can appease the guys on newgrounds with brilliantly created works of art, and give the crap submitted here even more of a bad name. Good luck in your endevors. And I hope to see this teaser become an actual animation.
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