needs lots of improvement
I'm going to be very honest... this was not appealing at all.
I'll also say that while newgrounds does host hentia... I rarely find hentia games that actually work. You have to remember, this is not a porn site, and if you submit bad content, expect to be trolled until there is nothing left of you.
The idea of what looked like a toy black dildo, coming in clip art with sounds, just didn't seem to come together right.
To improve, I suggest staying away from making hentia unless your 100% sure that what your making is going to be good. When hentia goes bad, it usually is either annoying, or just gross.
other areas to fix are actually making animations to go with this. I'm not talking about the black dildo, I'm talking about this as a whole. In real life, if your f***ing a person, I don't believe they are going to just stay stone still and moan. They bounce, they have physics. unless there dead.
Directions on what to do would of been nice also.
I believe you have something going, you just went in the wrong direction with this flash.
Don't rush to make and finish a flash. I admit I tend to slack off alot myself.
But good flash apps always take time to make. Rome wasent built in a day, so shouldn't your flash.
This is an awesome tutorial
I have a heck of a lot more fun drawing manga and the sort after have viewing this.
Thanks for spending your time making this. I enjoyed this a real lot.
I laughed my butt off on the toughest difficulty. It is quite funny to see all those bullets flying at once. But where the game strives also lacks in certain areas. As much as I appreciate the game, I feel like it could use a different background, rather than just default white.
Some sounds would go great with this. Maybe add some suiting music to this too? I like what I see, keep going, and improve on the areas that need it. I wish you luck on future submissions.
I usually don't go for dress-up games as they are usually all the same. This one is no different, plus its unfinished... that only adds salt and lemon juice to my already gaping wound.
If you are going to submit to here, make sure you have the following:
if you have none of these... don't submit here.
You need to work hard to make a good flash, and the patience to do so.
Don't ever rush and fall victim to ambition. It will only give you a bad name if you submit bad content to newgrounds.
Browse around newgrounds' tutorials and maybe pick up a technick or two, then apply what you've learnt in your next submission.
Thanks for the advice, but I merely submitted this here to see what people think of this and how I can improve it before entirely finishing it.
Also, I know it's only half finished, but if I hid the other button of the second character, if would also be half done, but would anyone even notice it?
I don't think so.
I made this game because I wanted to, i re-used old material I had already drawn because I wanted to see if i could make this work,
nand to see if I was even able to make this.
what would be the point of drawing new models and clothes for something the might not even work?
Now that I know it works, I can edit ikt later, add more clothes, sub-menus and additional characters.
Also, this is Newgrounds, the home for flash animations, games, movies and music.
I do not see why all content here MUST be complete,
If I want to submit works in progress to see what other people think, to get building-criticism, to find flaws and bugs in the BETA, so I can remove the bug and make it better, then why are you so angry at me?
if you're a troll, then gtfo
if you want to give real critisism, I won't stop you, in fact, I will be glad to have you.
you need to work out your skills in flash
I usually find games like these on newgrounds nowadays, this one is sadly no different. Areas to improve on: the art style-> I have seen a few newgrounders that can pull off stick people animation well, but only a few. the art needs a huge face lift. Not only is it not appealing, but it just looks unprofessionally done. A good flash requires extensive time to make, and if you rush, you just are going to end up making something bad. Moving on, The core gamplay-> While I'm into fixed shooters and related content as much as the next guy, I don't really like it when the game play is nearly unplayable. I mean, I sat for near an hour trying to figure out how to get by stage one... Stage one is by far normally the easiest of levels to complete. but this was very frustrating because you have to be right on the finest line to get through it. work together with someone, you have a better chance of making good content with a partner. As they say, Two heads are better than one. the game its self is short, very short, and the final boss was, well... sloppy. Take your time when making flash, I can't stress enough how important it is to take your time. Rome wasn't built within one day, so shouldn't your flash. One last thing is the music. It sounds like someone was beatboxing in the background, and not actual music, even the gameplay sounds were terrible to listen to. One thing that seems to haunt me the most is that when you go to start over, the music overlap each other, and it sounds just plain old bad. Overview
concept: A fixed shooter gone wrong
Graphics:everything was done right unprofessionally drawn
sound: sounds like a kid beat boxing, and i wish there was a mute button for the music.
playability: rubbing lemon on a gaping wound, does that sound fun?
entertainment: virtually none
replay value: low
that is my review overall. Just try harder next time, please?
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